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author | Boud Roukema <boud@cosmo.torun.pl> | 2020-05-23 17:31:48 +0200 |
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committer | Mohammad Akhlaghi <mohammad@akhlaghi.org> | 2020-05-23 23:18:08 +0100 |
commit | df7180c1e4baceaa33baa00efc04eb42ecdfae84 (patch) | |
tree | a74d64c0706a15b5d5d4408b09892a313bf78c5d /COPYING | |
parent | 63b912a63abc2c7b8cd689f2de54495f0dc0c297 (diff) |
Main text: implement most of David's changes
This commit implements most of David's changes from c76727b, but excluding
some, such as the proposal to use 'which' in a restrictive clause in the
abstract. This is allowed, but the Fowler brothers' rule tends to followed
in science writing:
https://ell.stackexchange.com/questions/5/is-there-any-difference-between-which-and-that
A few points on the abstract:
* an immediate solution = singular
* The "immediate, fast short-term" benefits sentence sounded like it was
redundantly superfluously repetitively repeating doubled-up
information. Hopefully this edit is better.
* in the %Conclusion, "solutions" is vague, like people who say
"technology" when they're only talking about software, so this edit
reminds the reader to make the sentence more self-contained and
understandable.
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